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St. Johnís College Entrance Essay

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1. Explain in detail why you wish to attend St. Johnís College; please evaluate the strengths and weaknesses of your formal education to date.

      What do I really, really, really want? I want to be with a wandering focus. To concentrate on what intrigues me, but when it bores me I want to be free to explore tangents. I want to live deliberately without obligation. I want direction and work, but also the freedom to change directions and alter my work. I want to observe the world, absorb the world and be the world. To see everything, appreciate everything and bask in the commonality of all things. I want love. I want freedom. I want intangible limitations. I want respect from all who I know and veneration from no one. I want to get out of the rat race. I want to live without goals and expectations from myself and others.  A way of life that at first glance seems primal, but upon further examination becomes apparent that it has been chosen after much careful thought and reflection. An uncluttered existence filled with peaceful hours, unfettered silence and waves of contentment.  I want to lose my ego and keep my confidence. I want to see the earth with my eyes and the world with my mind. I want to enjoy luxury without guilt and face minimalism with contentment. I want to live without want.
      I want an education that helps me move towards this holistic approach of understand. When I was younger I saw colleges and universities as places where Einsteins and Des Cartes brushed elbows as they published new philosophies or split a few atoms before lunch. A world where all time was spent in the amusing or exciting state of productive leisure. Enjoying so much what others would call Ďworkí and making advancements in humanity while hardly realizing it. Thatís where I wanted to go.
      But I digress, along with high school came guidance counselors and relatives demanding to know what was to become of me after high school, or even after college. When given the response of a shoulder shrug from an impressionable high school freshmen, it was inevitable that words of advice and direction would suddenly erupt. Tales of Ďwhere the money isí, what career would Ďbe noblestí, or what jobs will lead to Ďthe good life.í The image of post high school education quickly changed from a learning utopia to a launch pad into the world of capitalism. No longer were great minds enjoying their work in a heightened awareness of productive leisure, now they were driven by deadlines, promotions, prestige and the need to compete.
      Learning is brushed aside in the frenzied competition about grades and scores, both of which are standardized, regulated and emphasized.. The greatest weakness of my formal education has been itís need to adhere to a strict curriculum. It seems at every level some faculty member is reporting to another and teachers feel their jobs are in jeopardy if they veer far off the path of the carefully plotted academic schedule set forth by their superiors.. Iím not going to claim that teachers donít have a passion for their work, indeed Iíd be inclined to argue the opposite for the majority of instructors Iíve had. However, the standard system of education isnít conducive to passionate learning and teaching. A teacher can have his/her job in the balance dependent upon what percentage of his/her students know arbitrary facts or equations presented to them on a standardized test. That alone is enough to make a teacher of any subject divert from a particular area of study that is of must use and interest to both the student and teacher, to one that must be covered due to mandatory tests and set curriculums of which the teacher has no control.
      This managerial aspect of formal education creates a dry, arid and tepid learning environment that lacks any authentic enthusiasm. Of course, the society doesnít supply schools to itsí youth for their enjoyment and enlightenment. Itís there to provide a stable ground so a democracy can function as well as promote the state of the economy. Students are reduced to citizens and capitalists. Teachers are reduced to drill sergeants. Learning is reduced to training.
      Of course, the great counter-argument to this constitutes the greatest strength of my formal education to date: balance. Thanks to set curriculums and mandatory tests I now have basic knowledge of every subject that a perceptive group of people have decided is important to have basic knowledge of (preposition ending**). Iíve been exposed to most major branches from which education stems. I know the roots.
      Another strength of my education is its introduction to rules and regulations  As much as I loathe bureaucracy, it is a big part of a democratic government and large corporate operations. It benefits us all by preventing corruption from unscrupulous individuals prepared to take advantage.  In many ways the education system prepares us for such red-tape. We must fill out special forms whenever we have a request and have them sent to the correct administrators. We deal with delays and people who seem to do everything in their power to stop us with no apparent reason behind their actions other than ĎItís policyí. Reports, requests and dealing with authority is all part of the governmental process that we must live under. While big bureaucratic workings donít make learning easier, they do require one to learn to adhere, comply and understand the running of our nation and capitalistic America.
      While I can appreciate that we must learn to deal with administrative workings, itís now time for higher education. Education that prepares and assists in the development of a persons abilities to understand, comprehend and function in their world. A level of education that need not deal with basics anymore, but rather, specializations, self-discovery and abstract ideas.
      St. Johnís philosophy is congruent with the ideal Iíve envisioned for what education ought to be. I donít want to get caught up with my GPA. I donít want to be concerned about class rank. I want to focus on learning and my own enlightenment. St. Johnís teaching of allowing students to lead the way will allow me to thrive.
      What I like most about St. Johnís College is its philosophy of education in creating an environment where students learning is authentic and undepartmentalized. Connections between subjects and texts are made without restriction. My education, to date, has not to any significant degree satisfied my intellectual curiosity.  It has not engaged me to the depth and extent that I desire. St. Johnís approach will help to quench my thirst for not only knowledge, but understanding. St. Johnís, more than any other school, will help me to get what I really, really, really want.

2. Respond to both parts: (a) Describe your reading habits and your experience with books. (b) Choose some book that has been important in shaping your thoughts and discuss a single aspect of it (not the book as a whole) that is particularly significant to you.

      I read sporadically. I can go weeks with mere newspapers. Then there are weekends that Iíll read five books in forty eight hours. I rarely check books out of the library. Rather, I borrow them indefinitely from friends, or purchase them on impulse at the book store that I so often peruse.
      Since I entered high school I find myself to be a fan of non-fiction works. Iím particularly entertained by cleverly written essays and works by witty individuals in the scientific, philosophical and religious realms. I enjoy authors who can get across ideas in an entertaining fashion that reveals lots about both them and their subject.
      Though, I am flexible. There is nothing quite like a well-written book of fiction that uses metaphors and symbolic characters to get across a profound point in an indirect way. One of my favorite pieces of fiction is ďThe FountainheadĒ by Ayn Rand. The book has several layers of meaning and varying metaphoric symbols. What I enjoyed most, however, was the main character of Howard Roark. An individual who came alive for me and whom I venerate for his standings. Ayn Rand created the character of Roark as a non-conformist working in the field of architecture. Roark created buildings that were designed to be lived in and were the epitome of utilitarian offices and homes with a unique visual beauty about them that was seen by the more traditional community of architects as ugly, egotistical and different for the sake of being different. Roark knew better. His designs were perfectly built for the clients who ordered them and their lives would be easier within them.
      What separates Roark from all other non-conformist characters in stories is that he feels no desire to explain his work to anyone. He is not swayed from his position by anyone and he is never venerated for his work. He doesnít feel the need to take credit for what he has done, the satisfaction of doing it and knowing, in his own mind, that he did it was enough. Most certainly he will never try to convince anyone that his work is either better or worse. He creates and waits complacently for others to share in his genius. He had principles about his work and absolutely refused to go against them at all, without exception. He had priorities and lived for himself, not for his image, I respect that immensely.

3. Select some experience from which you have derived exceptional benefit and describe it, explaining its value to you.

      In December of 1999 I had decided to start a business to make some extra money as my job as a marionette artist at a local puppet theater wasnít going to foot the insurance bill of my newly acquired t-bird when the slow-puppeteering season set in in January. I can type approximately 130 words-per-minute so I decided Iíd attempt a new idea. A website that slow-typing individuals could use to submit picture files of hand-written papers and I would convert them to electronic text format based on a per-page fee. So I spent a few sleepless nights building a website, promoting it and beginning the business. It was slow going to begin with. Orders came in on occasion, but then one day I received an order that would change the course of my life for the next six months to a year. A customer had submitted a hand-written paper in Mandarin. There was no way I could type it in any language other than English and have it be worth my while, but it got me to thinking about a new business I could start: A translation company.
      In January of 2000 I began working. I spent a couple weeks of sleepless nights building a website, promoting the business and lining up independently contracted translators. The new business idea was simple. I find individuals who can translate languages and put them in a database on my computer. Then I advertise on my company website that I can translate a large number of languages (at the peak my business could handle over 250 different language translations). When an order came in I would receive several documents with instructions on what language to translate it to. Then I would simply locate in my database available translators and send it out to the appropriate one. Upon delivery of the translated document to the client I would receive payment and give a percentage of the sale to the translator who did the work.
      This business thrived for several months. I made a substantial income without doing much work at all other than forwarding documents and processing payments. The income paid for my car, gas, as well as any new toys I felt I needed and even some left over for savings. Finally, however, translation software came along. I began to lose business to software packages sold by various companies that allowed my former clients to do their own, almost perfect, grammatically correct, translations using software which they only had to pay a one time fee for and could use as many times as they needed. In the summer of 2000 my company was not getting enough business to justify keeping the website up and I unfortunately had to close it. Although it was a short-lived life of only six months, this business was far from a failure.
      This experience changed my perceptions about things. It has made me realize that I do not need to depend on others for money, whenever I need it alls I need is a clever idea and a little luck. Itís changed my outlook on my college aspirations as well. I donít feel the need to go after a career-oriented major or field of study because I already know how to make a living. With the knowledge I gained through this experience I feel completely confident that wherever I am I can always at least get by and I never have to feel tied down to any one job or career because of fiscal issues. Iím freed of a burden. It has allowed me to pursue college with an attitude focusing on an education for me, not for my career.

4. If you wish, provide the Admissions Committee with any additional information that you think is relevant to our consideration of your application. You may wish to discuss your health or family situation, your special talents or hobbies, your religious life, your accomplishments, or your post-college plans.

      My name is Michael W. Hills the first. Iíve grown up in a not so big town just outside of everywhere, across from what Iím told is the ďsecond most-climbed mountain in the worldď. In this cul-de-sac of the universe Iíve managed to acquire some talents, hobbies, mannerisms and some not-so-ordinary abilities that Iíd like to brag about for a moment.
      I have an ability that few humans possess. Itís an inborn talent, not something that can be easily learned: Chin-balancing, Iíve been able to do it for as long as I can remember. Iím sure youíve seen this on television, at the circus or at any other venue where people with freakishly odd talents congregate. I can balance almost anything on my chin. So far Iíve done such things as ladders, kayaks, chairs, flags, a large array of musical instruments and desks, but who knows what the future holds for my chin.
           Now, I know what youíre thinking. Youíre thinking, ďWhat a useless ability.Ē Well, allow me to expand upon the subject. One day, in the spring of Ď99, I was walking around a local amusement park with a friend. We were talking and, in passing, I mentioned my ability to chin balance. She didnít know what I was talking about. There I was, talking to a good friend of mine of at least three years, and sheíd never witnessed this unique talent I possess. I was shocked and determined to show off immediately. So I scoured the grounds, found a folding chair, and proceeded to balance it upon my face. My friend was thoroughly impressed as was a park manager who happened to be walking by at the moment. The manager happened to be heading the entertainment department and offered me a job on the spot. I spent the rest of the summer doing stage shows with some other very talented individuals, I enjoyed it immensely.
      After the season at Whalom Park ended I was hired by an associate I met through the entertainment job. For the past two years Iíve been performing marionette shows at the largest marionette theater in New England, Drawbridge Puppet Theater. I learned the trade over a few months and have since become a dedicated artist of puppetry.
      I took up the guitar in 9th grade. Formal lessons were in the weekly schedule for a little over a year, then I had enough under my belt to learn on my own. I joined a band, played shows around the region for two years. We cut an album and had some fun. I eventually left the band because they were going in a musical direction that I wasnít following. I wanted to explore the acoustic guitar more than the electric. That wasnít in the bands game plan, so I left. Theyíre still thriving and playing as loud as ever. Through the years Iíve also gained the ability to play the drums, piano, harmonica and trumpet.
      Now, there are so many other things I could talk about, but I wouldn't want to bore. So Iíll just sum it all up. I can drive like an Indy racer,  swim like an Olympian and talk like a scientist. Iíve read War and Peace, run a mile in under four and a half minutes, and once baked a two tier pastry. I banish away peoples stress with my classical guitar pieces, save old ladies from the perils of street-crossing, assist stray dogs, and maintain excellent dental hygiene. I promote world peace during my free afternoons and always turn off the lights when I leave the room. I eat dessert first, my tires are rotated every three thousand miles and I once held my breath for six and a half minutes.

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